Here is the persuasive essay that I brainstormed and planned with you, took your suggestions for techniques and wrote on the wall using your content today in  class.  This is exactly as it was typed period 4 with no changes:

Books are definitely better than TV any day of the week.  There are a number of reasons why this might be the case, and I will go through several of them in this essay.  You need to ensure that you are reading books instead of watching TV for the following reasons: that it promotes imagination, is essential for good literacy learning, and books can offer a great deal more detail than any movie ever could.

Have you ever sat in front of the television for a couple of hours and felt like you have a headache?  Have you felt that familiar feeling that you let several hours of your life slip away without accomplishing anything?  This is the feeling that you get when you waste time by watching television instead of bettering yourself through reading.  Books give you the interactive experience that you long for when you are wasting time with television.  When you read a book, the characters and settings are not laid out for you already.  When you watch a film or a television program, you are locked into the director’s view of how the setting should look, or the characters should appear.  When you read, this is not the case.  You use your imagination to create those characters in your mind.  This mind exercise is good for your brain.  Statistics show that people only use about 10% of their mind while watching.  While you are reading, you are using far more of your brain capacity.  Your brain will turn to mush if you continue to waste time with television!

You will be unable to function in society without being able to read.  This is a fact!  Don’t let this happen to you…  The next time you pick up a book, smile to yourself as you know that you are making yourself a better reader by improving your vocabulary, grammar, punctuation, spelling, writing techniques, reading rate, comprehension and ability to structure your own writing.  You must have these skills, or you will not be able to function in our society.  All around us every day we are exposed to writing.  You need to be able to comprehend or understand what you read, and this comprehension only comes from reading books often.  In schools, it has been proven using stats provided by NAPLAN data that students who are successful in literacy go on to careers that have lots of opportunity for advancement and make lots of money.  This is no joke!  You need to be able to read effectively to function in our society!  This only comes from reading books often, not from watching TV.

If we start talking about value for money, there is no doubt that you can stretch you dollar further by purchasing books for your entertainment, as opposed to cashing out thousands of dollars for what needs to be the latest and greatest technology just to view digital television.  And just as you think you have a tv that will take you the distance, up comes the latest technology like 3D that will ensure that you go out and purchase another big new tv.  Don’t spend that ridiculous amount of money on something as wasteful as a tv.  Instead, go down to your local bookshops and for just $10 pick up a great story that will be available to you on your bookshelf for years to come.  Imagine sharing a beloved story with a son or daughter someday, just the way that you enjoyed it the first time around.  There is a reason why movies are made from books and not the other way around…  It can’t be done!  Books have detailed story lines and take ages to develop, while movies are over and done with in 2 hours tops.  Just think about the comfortable, cosy, corner where you curl up to read a book.  This just isn’t possible with the television, because you have to be in the room with the tv.  With a book, when you find that cosy spot, all you need is the book in your hand.

So it can be seen that books are far superior to tv in many ways.  There is no educational merit to tv when compared to books, there is no creative engagement, and there is simply no matching value for money when it comes to an engaging story that a book can provide you.

Obviously, there is no colour where we identified techniques in the text as a class, but you can see where we came from with the plan and requested techniques for each paragraph.  How would you score this essay on the rubric we used for your writing?

-Mr M



By popular demand, here are the 20 questions for persuasive writing taken from the keynote below:

Questions About Persuasive Writing

Because I have established that checking each of your blogs every time I need to collect work is going to take too long, we will try email.  Here is my email for homework and questions:


I will only check this email periodically, so if you have a pressing issue, best to use the other one I gave out in class.

When you submit written tasks, such as question/answer type activities, just type them in Pages, then cut and paste them into an email.  Then I won’t even have to open a file or download anything to my computer.

Let’s see how this works for a while…

-Mr M


How does the author get these deeper themes into a ‘simple’ picture book for children?

Use the SEED model for paragraph structure and the burger model for response structure.  Good luck!


Here is the assessment task sheet for your picture book task.  Have a good look at the requirements for the task.  As we prepare with in-class activities, you need to ensure you get full marks.

ASC Year 8 Picture Book Assessment 2010

To assist you in this proces, I will post the steps that we went through in class that will lead you to an excellent mark for your assessment:  ANY STEP THAT IS UNDERLINED IS A STEP WHERE YOU NEED TO BRING IT TO ME TO GET APPROVAL TO MOVE TO THE NEXT STEP!

1.  Brainstorm – this is where you come up with the themes you plan to teach the young ‘uns when you read them your picture book

2.  Consider character, plot, pics, colour use, construction, wording, design and story

3.  Plan your story before you  write it (maybe in a pages document)

4.  Write your story

5.  Storyboard your story – think about how the writing will go on each page (if any) and how your pictures will interact with the shape, style of book you are creating

6.  Do a rough copy of your book.  This will be a mock up that will tell you if your plan will work.  Don’t spend too much time on this part

7.  Final book – dazzle me!  I am not giving specific criteria here, as I want to see what you can do.

7.  Self assessment/reflection

8.  Practice reading to a friend / small group

9.  Final reading to the entire class (and target audience; they will be kind, I promise)


In preparation for your exhibition, you will need to complete an “artist’s profile” that will outline who you are as a person, and tell a bit about what inspired you to do what you do…  We will need to include a picture.

Your task:  Find out what goes into an artist’s profile and create a list of things.  Draft and finalise your profile by typing it and presenting it in a creative (but still readable way).

-Mr M


Fiest two weeks back, we will be working on a persuasive essay.  This is the new writing prompt for NAPLAN for all year groups.  You can have a preliminary look at persuasive pieces in this keynote:

Persuasive Writing Keynote for blog

Here is the writing prompt that you will be given:

Persuasive Writing Prompt yr8 2010


2 responses

1 08 2010

Questions for Picture Book stations:
1. What is the lesson of the book?
2. How do you know?
3. How have the characters been created to help to teach the lesson?
4. How have the characters been created to appeal to children?
5. How has the book been constructed to appeal to children?
You should have answered these questions in your groups for 6 different picture books. Each person should have submitted their own answers.

16 08 2010

What are the books names again?

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